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May 16, 2012 15:51
11 yrs ago
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Our children are only visitors to our house, and sadly.....

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Hi, can someone please proofread my text if it is well structured and understandable.... Thank you!

…Our children are only visitors to our house, and sadly, every visit comes to an end. When the time comes, we all have to let them go build their own homes and receive their own visitors. We can show the path they may follow, but cannot live their lives for them. I only hope that one day I will cope with this inevitability with dignity, but never let them leave my heart.
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May 16, 2012 18:51: lorenab23 changed "Level" from "PRO" to "Non-PRO"

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Non-PRO (3): Trudy Peters, Marga Shaw, lorenab23

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Discussion

EmmaH (asker) May 18, 2012:
Thank you for your help....

The poem is beautiful!
katsy May 17, 2012:
@ Suzan Thank you . Memories of reading this first in late adolescence, but only now, with children and a new first grandchild, does it strike home in all its beauty and truth.
liz askew May 17, 2012:
@Suzan. Thank you for posting this poem. Love never dies.
Suzan Hamer May 17, 2012:
Can't help but think of this by Khalil Gibran. “Your children are not your children.
They are sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself.
They come through you but not from you.
And though they are with you yet they belong not to you.

You may give them your love but not your thoughts,
For they have their own thoughts.
You may house their bodies but not their souls,
For their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.
You may strive to be like them, but seek not to make them like you.
For life goes not backward nor tarries with yesterday.
You are the bows from which your children as living arrows are sent forth.
The archer sees the mark upon the path of the infinite, and He bends you with His might that His arrows may go swift and far.
Let your bending in the archer's hand be for gladness.
For even as He loves the arrow that flies, so He also loves the bow that is stable.”
katsy May 16, 2012:
I would agree with Liz, though am not very bothered by 'building' or 'making'. I might have said "I hope I will be able to cope".But your question is, is it well-structured and understandable, and the answer to that is 'yes' IMO. (and... as another mum, I think I am coping...)
liz askew May 16, 2012:
Having said that, he does still say "...is there anything to eat, mum?"
liz askew May 16, 2012:
FWIW, seems ok to me, except for "build their own homes", should it be "make their own homes" as the former implies they are going to literally build a home from bricks and mortar. Also a comma is need after "...let them go," or else you could put "we all have to let them go to make their own homes..." Sad isn't it (I am a mother...) but it is all part of the scheme of things..I think my son "left home" from about the age of 13, when he started to relate more to his peers:)
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