Sep 19, 2008 12:58
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too many of's or will it do as is?
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Specification of the technique of acquisition of the data of geodetic measurement of the objects of track facilities
Please advise if it is ok as is or help with rephrasing
Thank you in advance!
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Specification of the technique of acquisition of the data of geodetic measurement of the objects of track facilities
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Ouch!!
Here's my suggestion - it's a sort of "half-way house"
Data acquisition technique specification for geodetic measurement of the objects of track facilities.
But you certainly can't leave your six "of's" in 18 words...
Data acquisition technique specification for geodetic measurement of the objects of track facilities.
But you certainly can't leave your six "of's" in 18 words...
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13 mins
My suggestion
Specification of the data acquisition technique for geodetic measurement of the objects of track facilities
Peer comment(s):
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Demi Ebrite
: I would write it like David Moore, but if this work needs to stay very close to the translation, as is sometimes specified, this is good!
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Thank you, Demi.
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David Hollywood
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track facility object geodetic measurement data acquisition technique specification
one way round the "ofs"
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Note added at 6 mins (2008-09-19 13:04:36 GMT)
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or: "specification of the track facility object geodetic measurement data acquisition technique" to make it more readable ....
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Note added at 7 mins (2008-09-19 13:06:00 GMT)
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might need some more polishing but that's the general idea :)
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Note added at 15 mins (2008-09-19 13:13:25 GMT)
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maybe: "specification of the data acquisition technique for the geodetic measurement of track facility objects" ... makes it more readable still but I would chect the terminology ... e.g "track facility objects"
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Note added at 16 mins (2008-09-19 13:15:01 GMT)
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oops ... should read "check" of course :)
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Note added at 6 mins (2008-09-19 13:04:36 GMT)
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or: "specification of the track facility object geodetic measurement data acquisition technique" to make it more readable ....
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Note added at 7 mins (2008-09-19 13:06:00 GMT)
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might need some more polishing but that's the general idea :)
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Note added at 15 mins (2008-09-19 13:13:25 GMT)
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maybe: "specification of the data acquisition technique for the geodetic measurement of track facility objects" ... makes it more readable still but I would chect the terminology ... e.g "track facility objects"
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Note added at 16 mins (2008-09-19 13:15:01 GMT)
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oops ... should read "check" of course :)
Peer comment(s):
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David Moore (X)
: Haven't you gone a bit TOO far?
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Sheila Wilson
: It is neat, though
13 mins
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16 mins
way too many!
one option:
specification of the data acquisition method for obtaining the geometric measurements of railway infrastructure objects
(and if these objects are in fact buildings, you should use 'buildings', and 'dimensions' would then be preferable to 'geometric measurements' -- or possibly in any case)
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sorry, I got a bit confused there -- 'geodetic measurements' = measured geodetic data, so my suggestion should read
specification of the method for acquiring the geodetic data of railway infrastructure objects
specification of the data acquisition method for obtaining the geometric measurements of railway infrastructure objects
(and if these objects are in fact buildings, you should use 'buildings', and 'dimensions' would then be preferable to 'geometric measurements' -- or possibly in any case)
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Note added at 18 mins (2008-09-19 13:16:35 GMT)
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sorry, I got a bit confused there -- 'geodetic measurements' = measured geodetic data, so my suggestion should read
specification of the method for acquiring the geodetic data of railway infrastructure objects
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Deborah Workman
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Technical specification for acquiring geodetic measurement data for track [facility] objects
Yes, too many. You have some good suggestions already, but since they sound possibly too literal to me, I offer this suggestion as well. Only your context will tell you for sure!
I agree with Ken that you might substitute "railway" for "track", though there's nothing wrong with "track" used in this way. I think you might also leave out the word "facility" as you see in the following examples:
Southern and the South Carolina Geodetic Survey collected over 300 surveyed ..... Track Features are track objects that fall within the center of two rails ...
www.arema.org/eseries/scriptcontent/custom/e_arema/library/...
Geodetic surveying of railway objects ... Rail head and wheel profile geometry measurement... Software for railway track irregularity correction using heavy ...
library.witpress.com/pages/listPapers.asp?q_bid=138
Note that a measurement may be made up of several types of data. Otherwise, you might more simply say "... geodetic measurements for [OR of] ... objects".
I agree with Ken that you might substitute "railway" for "track", though there's nothing wrong with "track" used in this way. I think you might also leave out the word "facility" as you see in the following examples:
Southern and the South Carolina Geodetic Survey collected over 300 surveyed ..... Track Features are track objects that fall within the center of two rails ...
www.arema.org/eseries/scriptcontent/custom/e_arema/library/...
Geodetic surveying of railway objects ... Rail head and wheel profile geometry measurement... Software for railway track irregularity correction using heavy ...
library.witpress.com/pages/listPapers.asp?q_bid=138
Note that a measurement may be made up of several types of data. Otherwise, you might more simply say "... geodetic measurements for [OR of] ... objects".
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